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Post by chase on Apr 11, 2008 23:25:11 GMT -5
{Things Are Shaping Up To Be Pretty Odd}
Your Name: Jasmine Age:14 Role playing Experience:hm 2 years Contact Info: Pm's How Did You Find Us: Advertisement on my site
{Time To Dance}
Full Name: Chase Huster Nickname: nothing yet Age/ Date of Birth: Eighteen/ October 30th Grade: Freshman Poster: Hayley Williams
{Losing The Feeling of Feeling Unique}
Likes: Guys talking reading joking going to concerts for famous bands friends music being mean fun drama!! gossip movies dark
Dislikes: writing chocolate romantic movies cooking getting turned down performing reading in public Zits
Hobbies: Music Make up Fashion Goals:to be a famous movie make-up artist or a famous singer!! Fears: spiders ladybugs
{Imagine Knowing Me}
Personality: Chase is fun to be around she is always making jokes and talking to people she likes. She is Not good at meeting new people and just staring a conversation out of no where. Chase loves to smile and to be happy. She Can be a drama queen when she is fighting with someone. She will spread rumors about them so she gets more glory out of it. Chase has been at the school for one year. She does not know many people yet. Chase keeps to her self, and studies for school so she can get on with her life. Chase hates to fit in with the rest of the school, she is better know as a scene kid.
At least I'm safe inside my mind, secrets;; Chase hates getting shots most of the time when she needs to get them she would cry. Chase will never admit to anyone that she is scared to fit in, It makes her fell invisible, like no one will not notice her if she can't find a way to make her self different. She loves to watch cartoons in the morning!.
Physical Appearance;;Chase loves to be the odd one out. She is always looking for a way to be incoherent from others at the school. She has elegant green eyes the stand out against her pale skin. Chas has darker orange hair that she died to make it the way it is. Chase has side bangs the sweep off to the side. She never wears her hair up, she thinks that people who have their hair up look stupid. Chase wears skinny jeans most of the time,with flat shoes. Most of the time chase will have on a hoodie, or a t-shirt
Biography;;Chase grew up in a small town out of California. She had a small family. Chase has two older brothers named kage and Aaron. Kage, Aaron, and chase were all close as they were little. They would do everything together. Their mother,Kim, was a loving mother and loved to spend time with her kids. Kim was a clean freak and made them clean the house as any other parent would. Casey, their father, was always out getting drunk after work they never knew why he would do it but he did. The rest of the family hated it and tried to get him to stop but he wouldn't. Casey when he was not drunk was a kind father to them. He left the family when chase was 14
Chase, kage, Aaron, Casey, and there mom lived on a farm. They had lived on the farm for many years. There was not many houses around them so they would have to find something else to do. Chase loved to sing in her room and make things. She loved to imagine things. April 11, is when they had to move back to the big city, where they could afford to live. Chase was 14 when they moved back into a city. She was not use to being around so much kids, her old school was much smaller and had less children running around.
Chase was sent to the school at the age of 17 she has only been at the school for a year and has tried to make friends but that never worked out. People would call her a freak because of the different colors in her hair. Chase keeps up on her home work. On the weekends Chase will go out and do something on her own.
{But It's Better If You Do}
Family At Hastings: No one Sexuality: Straight Crushing?: COOPER and LARSON Best Friend Requests: Current Residence: dorms Major/Minor: Arts, Visual and Performing Music
{Toast The Fine Folks}
RP Sample;;
Chase looked around in her locker taking out a note book, paper, and a small pencile for her next class. She had a few minuets before she had to get to the conspired teacher and his teachings, they never seemed to end. Chase shut the small door softly and turned to look at the overly crowed halls. There were many people laughing, and joking in their own small groups.
Chase pushed past people before entering the large class room. It smelled of mixed perfume that the other girls caked on before coming to class. Chase looked around the room and walked to an open seat in the middle of the room. She set her few things on her desk. Chase put her elbow on the desk and rested her head in her hand waiting for the teacher to move on when the bell rings.
Read the Rules?: yes ma'am / sir Other: nope
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Post by _hoC Admin on Apr 11, 2008 23:33:57 GMT -5
Most was good, but I do have some requests!
You have some grammar issues in a few places. So just read over the the big paragraphs to see if you can spot them. For instance, you didn't capitalize Chace's name a few times, and you had some run on sentences.
The roleplaying sample was a bit too short. Try to make it at least two full paragraphs. Maybe look through some of the other applications for tips.
Also, please capitalize her name and fix the one letter in her last name. So just tweak those things around a little bit and get back to me! I do want you to join!
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Post by chase on Apr 12, 2008 0:11:39 GMT -5
sorry, I think i got most of it now XD
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Post by _hoC Admin on Apr 12, 2008 9:03:48 GMT -5
You still have a few grammar errors that should be taken care of. Um, for example I think a couple times you said 'there', when it should be 'their'. There are still some run-on sentences and a couple sentence fragments.
And you still need to capitalize her name in the display name spot. Come on, you're almost there! I can feel it!
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Post by chase on Apr 12, 2008 20:51:35 GMT -5
ermm i feel stupid now i think i got it again again um where is her name not capitalized i looke all over and can't find what your talking about?
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Post by _hoC Admin on Apr 12, 2008 22:16:19 GMT -5
Please don't feel stupid. But, I'm afraid I'm going to have to deny the application. It was a good attempt, but just not what we are looking for. Don't be discouraged. After a bit more practice, feel free to come back and try again.
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